Karasu
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Post by Karasu on Mar 20, 2006 5:38:14 GMT 10
The descriptiveness is good -- it catches a reader's interest. But it's not something you could read again so soon after finishing it -- it's similiar to the anime of Yami no Matsuei -- once the mystery's figured out it's no fun. Keep with the story twists.
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Post by samul on Mar 20, 2006 11:36:41 GMT 10
im so gonna read i read the bit of it u posted on ur blog & it rocked but the skool computers wont let me so it might take a while :S
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Post by YahNe on Mar 20, 2006 11:41:27 GMT 10
The Department of Education has banned Freewebs from school computers. Sorry
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Post by eldradir on Mar 20, 2006 16:18:36 GMT 10
Yeah, I hate the DET. I tried to play a practical joke once... I found the page where you request the blockage of websites, copied its address and pasted it in the field labeled "website you wish to have blocked" ;D . Shame it didnt work And yeah Karasu, I DO agree with you. Its a one time read... Well, two times actually. The first to find the twists, and the second to see the clues you missed . Its a no win situation, actually... If you put in heaps of twists, the story is more interesting but can only be enjoyed once... Where if its straightforward, you can reread it but it is NEVER as good as it could be Damn its good to read some REAL feedback for a change ;D (no offense intended to Fractured Princess )
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Post by Fractured Princess on Mar 21, 2006 22:09:42 GMT 10
Yeah..... None taken *Glares*
Just because I love it and could read it over. Hey don't forget... You first off made it to appeal to me yeah? So do you REALLY expect me to find faults in something I love so much?
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Post by eldradir on Mar 23, 2006 20:01:13 GMT 10
You have a fair point...
Chapter 11 is up people. And now you must all bow down to me, for I am officially a published poet ;D
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Post by YahNe on Mar 23, 2006 21:23:04 GMT 10
Heh... I would have been if the damned website I'd submitted it to hadn't decided it would stop publishing books. God damn stingy assholes.
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Post by eldradir on Mar 25, 2006 20:45:11 GMT 10
NYEH!! For all those people who didnt think it possible (myself included) I wrote a whole chapter in ONE day ;D ;D ;D
Chapter 12 is now up. ENJOY ;D ;D ;D
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Post by eldradir on Mar 26, 2006 20:19:57 GMT 10
...And, just to prove it wasnt a fluke... I DID IT AGAIN ;D Chapter 13 is now complete and posted on my site. 2 chapters in as many days (and a poem on the side). GREAT stuff ;D ;D ;D I may as well take the time to point out that Eldradir is well and truly over 1/4 finished now. 52 A4 pages (on my computer) and 30,000> words. Im trying to organise my timing so that I have it done inside 4 months... I SHOULD be able to do this, but yeah. Keep ur fingers crossed for me yall
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Post by eldradir on Jun 2, 2006 15:29:48 GMT 10
Just a little announcement here to save making a new topic. I refuse to post any of my writing on the internet herein, and any that was already posted has either been removed, or is about to be. If you wish to be sent a copy of anything, email me at dave_b_rulz@hotmail.com
Oh, and just for an on topic update - 17 chapters have now been completed. If you wish to read them, see the above comment
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